Not so long ago,
In a place not so far away
Lived an ugly kangaroo named Melbourne
Who wished he’d be handsome one day
His tale was too long,
And his ears were too short
He had an odd growth on his toe
That everyone called a wart
The other kangaroos made fun of him
And mocked him 24/7
When he was young, dreamed of a place he’d be accepted
To him, that would truly be heaven
So he lived a quiet life
By himself, but vaguely content
For he thought hours alone,
Were hours better spent
You see, he shut out his feelings
Of hurt and of pain
He did not befriend anyone
And from crying, he would refrain
One kangaroo tried everyday
To be Melbourne’s friend
Her name was Sydney
And she gave all the strength she could lend
But he shut her out
And accused her good intentions
She hopped away crying
And halted her daily interventions
When he had lived 17 years
And 92 days more
He got a tad lonely
He wasn’t so sure of himself anymore
As an old, lonely, ugly kangaroo
With white fur and glasses
He decided to make a speech
One he would give to the kangaroo masses!
“A long time ago,
I valued my pride
Even though I was ugly
And that, I couldn’t hide
I shut people out
Of my heart and my days
But now I realize
The dramatic error of my ways
You see, there are some things
That kangaroos just cant live without
Love and friendship are two I rejected
And I regret my decision, no doubt.
I didn’t want to risk my feelings
I didn’t want to risk my heart
And I threw away some thing that could have been great
If it had been given the chance to start.”
He hopped down from the hill
And ended his speech with a tear
He hopped off into the sunset
As his shadow faded and began to disappear
I would love to give you a happy ending
I would love to say that Sydney heard all this
It would be nice if she listened
And thought maybe it was she he missed
But Sydney had died two weeks prior
To Melbourne’s speech and didn’t hear a word
Oh I wish I was lying!
But I’m reporting exactly what had occurred
However, Melbourne’s speech
Did change a few kangaroos
Even though most of them
Made fun of him even more when they heard the news
But it taught the ugly ones
To live life just the same
And not to think all Roo’s are jerks
But to believe that some are as sweet as they claim.















Comments
I see a lot of symbolism here....like...im guessing u werent talkin about kangaroos in ur story.....thas fairly obvious, especially by last stanza...the moral of the story. Wut i'd like to kno ...is wee u talkin about a specific situation? cuz that wood be both interesting and funny lol. Anyway....poetically speaking...most of the of the stanzas flowed really well.....but some others u cood look over and put more thought into, and then the whole poem will be great. Wow that sentence didnt make sense. For instance, try not to switch around sentences in ur poems. i.e. The flowers were beautiful. a switch wood be like 'Beautiful, were the flowers' Get wut i mean? Lemme show u an example in urs....
You see, there are some things
That kangaroos just cant live without
Love and friendship are two I rejected
And I regret my decision, no doubt.
Maybe change it to make without's rhyme something else that makes the stanza flow more smoothly...liiiike
You see, there are some things
That kangaroos just cant live without
Love and friendship are too I rejected
As well as the heart I reasoned out
idk...that makes no sense either.....u kno wut.....i hav no idea wut im sayin lol....im juss gonna go....crawl in a hole....
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How great Thou art
and yea i totally get wut u mean wit the whole switching thing...i call it Yoda talk, but i kno wut u mean. i do it jus cos i got lazy and couldnt think of a word to ryhme.....ill try to change it sometime and i liked what you said, but no offence, i was tryin to keep this as a basic story and so....um...sophisticated i guess. and i love the line u added, but u made it sound like this was a real person or something, and dont get me wrong, thats an awesome thing and i mos def love the line...but idt it goes wit the rest of the poem. do you? idk...ill try and work on it.
anyways, thankyou for the comment....YAY for long reviews!! i have a ton of reviews for ur stuff, i jus am too lazy to post them...its 1 in the morning and i have 2 papers due...uh later today that i havent started lol...sooo i gotta get goin. but thanks again! c ya later...um...later today haha
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~*~allie
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